Mrs. Belden
Honors English 1
17 September 2014
What I Changed In My ATTWN Essay
Mainly what I changed in my "And There Were None Essay", was some of the wording I
used. In my first draft some of the wording styles I used such as stretching out a sentence more than I
should, wasn't really how it was supposed to be. In a few scenarios I made a sentence longer than it
should have been, so in my last draft I broke up some of those really long sentences into shorter
multiple ones. I believe that sharing my essay with an adult was the best form of help I received in
order to improve my essay. I believe this because that not all of my peers are at the same level of a
writer that I am at, so therefore I feel that it was more beneficial to have a more experienced adult
take a look at my paper, and help me out with some things I may or may not have needed to
improve. I believe that continuing to have an experienced adult look at my future Honors English 1
papers is the best way for me to improve and grow as a writer so that I can continuously learn from
my mistakes and do better in the future based upon the corrections I make in the near past. I believe
that this year I may need to possibly improve the lengths of the papers I write. I am good at adding
detail, but sometimes I feel that I did way more than I was supposed to, and in the process I ended up
wasting a good portion of my time, so hopefully in the future I will learn to write good papers with
out adding over excessive detail than I need to. By the end of the year I hope to learn how to write
more efficiently with less detail but the same good quality, this is something I will strive to master
all year until I finally learn how to do it correctly. That concluded my paper on, What I Changed In
My ATTWN Essay.
You are skilled in adding voice to your writing. In other words, when I read your writing, I can hear your voice and style, which is really cool! Also, your ability to think about your learning is mature. I am excited to watch you grow as a writer in my class this year because I truly believe that, by setting your own goals, you will push yourself to improve.
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